I really enjoyed reading this thread, so

- Any comments about plot? Things to be sure to keep, things to get rid of!
- Any characters you would not miss, or don't work?
- Other suggestions?

Plot was excellent, nothing to throw.
Characters work, I like the shades of grey in some, none is to get rid of either.
Not too sure about holmes analysis relocation, I thought it worked perfectly in this thread, but as long as I don't reread the whole book I can't say if anything gets broken.
Thanks for taking my dave comment into account,
having him hear the shots as an incent to come back as you propose works perfectly for me, get partly rid of the guilt and save him if you can/wish, I'm not found of GoT treatment for likable characters, and perri is a hard blow already. Now if Dave survives the radio must break and he must go somehow under the radar for a while, otherwise the opening scene doesn't work


I like the idea of a rodriguez/bunny sequel (throw devlin/holmes and maybe bondarev in, if you can), hope we'll get to read it here as well M. Slee cheers

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